Music L♥vers....help pls.?

What do you think of my lyrics?





Song Title: It's you again





Last week, I saw you with her


You looked so happy,


I felt so more than sure


that it was over


with me and you





(Hook)


it happened so fast, what could I've done,


the chance I had was none, then you showed up at my door,


I don't want you anymore.





(Chorus)


Doorbell rings, when I answer it, you are there


Your at the door again.


Wind chimes blowing, outside it's snowing,


Candy and flowers in your hand.


It's you again.





I was at the store on Friday afternoon,


I saw you there, thought it was to soon,


Talking 'bout the mistakes we made,


we got together too late





(Chorus)





(Bridge)


It’s not about how long it takes


It’s not about why we broke up


We just need to remember


The good times we had and we’ll


Be together.


If the shoe fits


We’ll never miss.





Doorbell rings when I answer it, you are there


Your at the door again.


Wind chimes blowing, outside it's snowing,


Candy and flowers in your hand.


It's you a…


Doorbell rings when I answer it, you are there


Your at the door again.


Wind chimes blowing, outside it's snowing,


Candy and flowers in your hand.


It's you again


Again


Again


Again


It’s you again. Oh ooh oh…





Maybe Lovin' you still....

Music L♥vers....help pls.?
It's very pretty. I'd love to hear what it sounds like set to music.
Reply:Thats awesome, its really good
Reply:Sounds great, too much like my life though
Reply:Im not really into that kinda music but the people who are im sure love it.


some of your rhyme patterns are off but otherwise good


(I don't mean the actual words your are rhyming with)
Reply:one word: CHEESE...been there, done that...stop writing recycled lyrics
Reply:these lyrics are so cool i hope so will it be its tune.can you please send me its recording on mail
Reply:I'd probably change it if it was played on the Radio, I'm not into Country music.
Reply:i'm going to be honest with you. It's a little immature. Not to sound mean or anything but a 3rd grader could write this song.

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