What do you think of my song lyrics?

Song Title: It's you again





Last week, I saw you with her


You looked so happy,


i felt so more than sure


that it was over


with me and you





(Hook)


it happened so fast, what could i've done,


the chance i had was none, then you showed up at my door,


i don't want you anymore.





(Chorus)


Doorbell rings, when i answer it, you are there


Your at the door again.


Wind chimes blowing, Outside it's snowing,


Candy and flowers in your hand.


It's you again.





(Bridge)


It's not gonna work this time, no, no(on last no keep it going for at least 5 sec.)





I was at the store on friday afternoon,


I saw you there, thought it was to soon,


Talking 'bout the mistakes we made,


we got together too late





(Hook)





(Chorus)





(Bridge)





Maybe Lovin' you still....

What do you think of my song lyrics?
very nice i loved it make sure no one steals it
Reply:i like it a lot. very well thought. keep up the good work.
Reply:it's prety good. fine tune it a little try inserting the punch line - "may be lovin' you still" in the middle at some places. (like "I love you" in Ballerina Girl by george michael)





try putting a tune to it. then you can alter some words to suit the meter.





all the best. continue. you will become better.
Reply:sounds more like a poem
Reply:it's good
Reply:it's ok. there's really no room for interpretation. it reads just like a story. the only part that is slightly obscure is "Maybe Lovin' you still."
Reply:I really liked it.....I could feel what she is feeling.......the confusion and wondering .....


Even if you can't sing you can write songs..so keep up the good work......I hope to hear more of your work and maybe one day you will have a number one song.....that would be soooo neat
Reply:Too much like a poem. Rework it to be able to sing it.
Reply:All i can say is LOL.
Reply:hey I write songs too and if there's one thing I've learned over the years is it's not poetry and it's not meant to be read it's meant to be SUNG! so it doesn't matter what you write even one tiny little bit, all that matters is that you sing it OUT like you can FEEL it and it's coming from your heart and soul (%26amp;diaphragm!) and THAT'S what makes a killer song. So I'm humming a little tune to your words as I write this and I can feel it moving and maybe you're singing it now too. and maybe they're different melodies but thanks for sharing it with me and keep on making beautiful music!
Reply:I especially liked the course. And the "maybe lovin' you still...





You are doing good! So far, so good, keep up the good work!
Reply:Yoink! Now they're mine!!! Muahahahahahaha!!!!
Reply:I like it. It could use some polishing up. But I really think you are on the right track.
Reply:Those are pretty good... do you have any music to go behind it?
Reply:I think you have the potential to be a star. I mean, as long as you have the voice to back it up.





It sounds like a sad story, though. And I'm sorry for your loss :(

arenas