Could you please give my poem your opinions?

The wind's blowing


so hard with its intention


to knock me down,


causing me to sway


so flowerlike, planting


my feet like a flower's


roots in the Earth.





I sway and sway


so wildly I could


float up and


travel in the wind


like a lonesome seed.





But no matter


how frigid air violently


nibbles at my skin,


no matter how frail


my bones become


from use and abuse,


I will not tumble and fall!





You, wind, will


never make me fall like


snow, melting from


the caress of the warm


breeze, then gone


and forgotten


within the moist


soil.

Could you please give my poem your opinions?
Your last stanza, to me, doomed a very nice poem. I also did not like the word abuse in the third stanza, seemed out of place for the theme. Perhaps you could tighten the wording throughout. The first stanza for example:


The wind's blowing,


hard its intention


to knock me down,


it causes me to sway


my feet take root


like a springtime flower





Just a thought, overall a piece worth spending more time on. I have many myself that "stew".
Reply:that is like, great!!


seriously, it is absolutely fantastic
Reply:This is you at your best! How about submitting this one for the scholarship.
Reply:i like how you have a lot of nature involved in this poem, and the way you used human meaning entwined with nature.