Critque plz?????????

this is my poem and i wanna kno what u think.





As my tears fall down


like atumn leaves


deep inside


my soul grieves





As the clouds roll by


and time goes on


I wonder when the sun will rise


and the sunlight shall dawn





I feel so cold


like mid-winter snow


I miss the Spring


and watching the flowers grow





I kno not when the weather changed


or why it happened this way


All i have to hope for


Is the sunlight bringing a new day

Critque plz?????????
That's really great! Just work a little on the rhythm.
Reply:well, sounds a sad poem about hope. you may rethink the imagery such as "my tears fall down


like atumn leaves" tears dropping? and spelling of autumn.


It may be fashionable but I'd prefer "know" to "kno".


Overall I think you have ample potential to compose very moving poems! well done.


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Reply:on a scale of 1 -10 (and 10 being good) i would say and good


solid 9 to 9,5 .